tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8100373839462710495.post627744262105236553..comments2023-11-03T08:19:23.868-04:00Comments on Elizabeth Poole: First LinesElizabeth Poolehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03214706118828699708noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8100373839462710495.post-43478962096192642932013-04-08T13:57:16.706-04:002013-04-08T13:57:16.706-04:00Slave is a good word for it. And thanks for the eg...Slave is a good word for it. And thanks for the ego boost. ;)Elizabeth Poolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03214706118828699708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8100373839462710495.post-76416639784705589352013-04-08T13:55:52.368-04:002013-04-08T13:55:52.368-04:00I do like really hooky first lines. I just don'...I do like really hooky first lines. I just don't think they're where the work stops, and can hurt your novel if it doesn't properly flow with the rest of the prose. :D<br /><br />And yes, a pet peeve of mine too. I was going to say cockroach, but I thought angel was more appropriate. Elizabeth Poolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03214706118828699708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8100373839462710495.post-81321130474856906302013-04-08T11:52:31.231-04:002013-04-08T11:52:31.231-04:00I'm a big slave to the "hooky" first...I'm a big slave to the "hooky" first line. But you've got an interesting point about building. It's like the first sentence needs to be the foundation of the building, and not the flashy trim paint. Of course, what's awesome about your start to ZRT is that the first sentence *looks* like the flashy trim on that eccentric house next door, but then it turns out to be the foundation! Which means you haven't even hit the flashy trim part. Renahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02767762370997304308noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8100373839462710495.post-2534983610950312492013-04-08T10:27:21.155-04:002013-04-08T10:27:21.155-04:00I don't think it's crappy. "The last ...I don't think it's crappy. "The last time I died" is an interesting concept that makes me want to know what's going on.<br /><br />(Although it hits a pet peeve of mine when people refer to the deceased as potential angels since that does not fit the mythology of any of the major religions. Angels are separate beings from humans.)<br /><br />Also, nice new style for the blog. Me likey.Joseph L. Selbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16629531390894108695noreply@blogger.com